Can someone proofread my essay?
Just fix some grammar and spelling issues, and maybe gimme advice or whatnot. Thanks! you can send it after your proofread it to my email if you want! And please no rude comments on my position on health care. “Great physicians and nurses, skilled, caring and unparalleled in their training, intervened in my life and probably saved it. I was lucky but other Americans are not. It is time to speak again and stand again for the ideal that in the richest nation ever on this planet, it is wrong for 41 million Americans, most of them in working families, to worry at night and wake up in the morning without the basic protection of health care.†-Senator John Kerry The United States of America is the only wealthy, industrialized nation in the whole world that does not offer some sort of socialized medicine. Our current health care system consumes more money than similar nations, yet still leaves over 42 million Americans uninsured. 42 million Americans live in fear that they will substain some sort of injury and illness that could potentially put them in major debt or bankruptcy. For the sole superpower in the world, this is unacceptable. Health Care is a fundamental right that should be upheld by the United States government in order to maintain public health and keep it’s citizens thriving. A system that allows health care only to be attained by your income or your employer’s benefits is contrary to the belief that Americans have the right to Life, Liberty, and pursuit of Happiness. The United States of America spends more on health care than any other country in the world. Countries that utilize Universal health care are spending lesss money than the United States, yet still have a more effficent health care system. In the United States, total health spending accounted for 15.3% of the Gross Domestic Product (GDP) in the United States. In comparison, in Canada it was 10%, Switerland 11.3%, France 11.1%, and Germany 10.6%. The problem with the United States health care system is that that not all of this money spent on health care is actually getting to the hospitals and patients. A study shown at the Harvard Medical School found that Health care bureaucracy cost the United States 399.4 billion dollars in 2003, that is 31% of total health care spending in the United States (Thomson 62). Compare that to 16.7% for Canada (Thomson 62). Despite all these high costs of health care the United States still has over forty-two million people without health care and millions more with inadequate health care. It’s estimated that by switching to Universal health care the United States could cut back spending by as much as 286 million annualy. (Thomson 63). It is estimated that with the 286 billion dollars we’d save with a Universal health care policy, we would be enough to cover all of the uninsured and provide full prescirption drug coverage to everyone (Thomson 63). The United States’s health care performance has been slowly going downhill since the 1980’s. With the colossal amounts of money that United States spends on Health care efficency would be expected. Twenty years ago the United States had the highest life expetancy with the same health care system we use today. As of today the World Health Organization (or WHO) ranked the United States thirty-seventh for overall health care performance (Thomson 56). This decrease in efficency is due to other countries adopting Universal health plans, leaving the United States in the dust. In Canada for example, Canadians live on average three years longer then their American-counterparts. The Canadian infant mortality rate also stood at 5.4 deaths per a thousand babies. In comparison, the United States’s infant mortality rate is 6.9, with countries like Japan, Sweden, Norway, and Finland all having some of the lowest infant mortality rates. Even countries in the developing world are suprassing the United States. A baby born in El Salvador for example, has a higher chance of surviving than a baby born in Detroit. This is all astounding considering the billions of dollars we spend on health care. Competing countries are spending less money per person for health care and yet still have a healthier public with no one uninsured. This is a wake-up call to the United States government; we need a national health care policy or we will fall behind other nations on general public health. Over eighteen thousand Americans die every year of lack of health insurance; this denotes that Americans are suffering with lack of Universal health care. Granted, not all of uninsured Americans die, but the consequences can still be dire. Almost almost 50% of all bankrupcty filings cited as due to medical causes (Michael Moore) With Universal health care, these numbers would be nil. Even with our socalized medicine for seniors, Medicare, is ineffective. Medicare doesn’t cover all medical expenses. Medicare covers only 75% of the first 2,250 dollars worth of drugs due tomorrow haha
Homework Help - 1 Answers
Random Answers, Critics, Comments, Opinions :
1 :
When does this essay have to be proof read by? I found a lot of mistakes that I would love to help you with, but at the moment I can't because I am on Y!A doing research for an essay due tomorrow... But I would love to help.. To start off...In the first sentence take away the word "whole" because when you mention something about the world, we already know that's in referring to the whole wide world. So just put... The United States of America is the only wealthy, industrialized nation in the world that does not offer some sort of socialized medicine. Secondly, I don't think it's right to start off a sentence with a number. Like when you said "42 million Americans live in fear...." Fix it and write "Forty-two million Americans live in fear..." And right after that you wrote "that they will substain some sort of injury and illness" The correct word is "sustain".. So just take away the "b" :) ♥
Read more discussion :
